Title: Fecal indicator bacteria along multiple environmental exposure pathways (water, food,
and soil) and intestinal parasites among children in the rural northwest Ethiopia
Version: 3 Date: 18 Jan 2022
Reviewer's report:
I would like to thank the authors for their receptiveness towards the reviewer comments, I see
that the suggestions were answered appropriately and significant changes were made to the
manuscript. There are improvements to grammar and sentence structure that can be made still
with this revised manuscript (e.g. lines 61-62, 251, 274).
Specifically, in lines 77-79: "human boundary (external exposure assessment  to those that
estimate a dose after the contaminant has been taken up into the body (internal exposure
assessment) and measurement of host interaction with the environment, as documented by
Goddard FG, et al" there is a ")" parenthesis missing.
Another suggestion would be to review the use of the STH abbreviation defined in line 59. The
authors use it for "soil-transmitted helminth infections (STHs)  in 2020" but repeatedly use it
for solely "soil-transmitted helminth (STH)..." afterwards (see line 62 as an example).
I would suggest that the authors refrain from using first person language for the Methods and
Results sections as those should be written in third person (extensive use of "we").
After organisms are written once in full genus and species, the authors can abbreviate the genus
to the first letter. See the Intestinal parasitic infections in children section (lines 331-339),
parasite names can be abbreviated as they were already mentioned in the Methods section.
Similarly, the authors can abbreviate gram to "g" as it is standard understanding as a unit of
measurement (see lines 186 and 204 as examples).
Overall, I appreciate the efforts made by the authors to improve this manuscript for acceptance.
Title: Fecal indicator bacteria along multiple environmental exposure pathways (water, food,
and soil) and intestinal parasites among children in the rural northwest Ethiopia
Version: 3 Date: 18 Jan 2022
Reviewer's report:
I would like to thank the authors for their receptiveness towards the reviewer comments, I see
that the suggestions were answered appropriately and significant changes were made to the
manuscript. There are improvements to grammar and sentence structure that can be made still
with this revised manuscript (e.g. lines 61-62, 251, 274).
Specifically, in lines 77-79: "human boundary (external exposure assessment  to those that
estimate a dose after the contaminant has been taken up into the body (internal exposure
assessment) and measurement of host interaction with the environment, as documented by
Goddard FG, et al" there is a ")" parenthesis missing.
Another suggestion would be to review the use of the STH abbreviation defined in line 59. The
authors use it for "soil-transmitted helminth infections (STHs)  in 2020" but repeatedly use it
for solely "soil-transmitted helminth (STH)..." afterwards (see line 62 as an example).
I would suggest that the authors refrain from using first person language for the Methods and
Results sections as those should be written in third person (extensive use of "we").
After organisms are written once in full genus and species, the authors can abbreviate the genus
to the first letter. See the Intestinal parasitic infections in children section (lines 331-339),
parasite names can be abbreviated as they were already mentioned in the Methods section.
Similarly, the authors can abbreviate gram to "g" as it is standard understanding as a unit of
measurement (see lines 186 and 204 as examples).
Overall, I appreciate the efforts made by the authors to improve this manuscript for acceptance.
Please review this paper.
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Title: Fecal indicator bacteria along multiple environmental exposure pathways (water, food,
and soil) and intestinal parasites among children in the rural northwest Ethiopia
Version: 3 Date: 18 Jan 2022
Reviewer's report:
I would like to thank the authors for their receptiveness towards the reviewer comments, I see
that the suggestions were answered appropriately and significant changes were made to the
manuscript. There are improvements to grammar and sentence structure that can be made still
with this revised manuscript (e.g. lines 61-62, 251, 274).
Specifically, in lines 77-79: "human boundary (external exposure assessment  to those that
estimate a dose after the contaminant has been taken up into the body (internal exposure
assessment) and measurement of host interaction with the environment, as documented by
Goddard FG, et al" there is a ")" parenthesis missing.
Another suggestion would be to review the use of the STH abbreviation defined in line 59. The
authors use it for "soil-transmitted helminth infections (STHs)  in 2020" but repeatedly use it
for solely "soil-transmitted helminth (STH)..." afterwards (see line 62 as an example).
I would suggest that the authors refrain from using first person language for the Methods and
Results sections as those should be written in third person (extensive use of "we").
After organisms are written once in full genus and species, the authors can abbreviate the genus
to the first letter. See the Intestinal parasitic infections in children section (lines 331-339),
parasite names can be abbreviated as they were already mentioned in the Methods section.
Similarly, the authors can abbreviate gram to "g" as it is standard understanding as a unit of
measurement (see lines 186 and 204 as examples).
Overall, I appreciate the efforts made by the authors to improve this manuscript for acceptance.
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