Title: Blood Lead Concentrations Among Pediatric Patients with Abdominal Pain; A
Prospective Cross-sectional Study
Version: 3 Date: 20 Sep 2021
Reviewer's report:
The authors have addressed many of the concerns raised by the reviewers. However, many
grammatical issues remain making the paper distracting and hard to read.
BACKGROUND
Don't need comma between "problem, and" in the first line
In second paragraph, first sentence, should be "lead's". The remainder of this sentence is
confusing. Is it supposed to say "it is used in many products"?
"Reduced fertility" can be "infertility"
In your section I would change the sentence to say "Opium smoking with inhalation of lead
particles could cause lead poisoning." The remaining part of that sentence and the use of the
word "abuser" feels loaded. The following sentence is also confusing. Are you saying that opium
use by children caused the increase in lead poisoning in part?
METHODS
Turmeric is spelled incorrectly
Alcohol ethylic should be "ethyl alcohol"
RESULTS
Please standardize spacing between words in your table
MAPS
The red numbers on top of the gray background remain very hard to see
DISCUSSION
You've abbreviated GI here. This should be abbreviated at the first occurrence, which is in your
background, and then the abbreviation should be used thereafter
CDC stands for Centers for Disease Control and Prevention - this is misstated in the discussion.
And here you can just use the abbreviation, because you've abbreviated already
Title: Blood Lead Concentrations Among Pediatric Patients with Abdominal Pain; A
Prospective Cross-sectional Study
Version: 3 Date: 20 Sep 2021
Reviewer's report:
The authors have addressed many of the concerns raised by the reviewers. However, many
grammatical issues remain making the paper distracting and hard to read.
BACKGROUND
Don't need comma between "problem, and" in the first line
In second paragraph, first sentence, should be "lead's". The remainder of this sentence is
confusing. Is it supposed to say "it is used in many products"?
"Reduced fertility" can be "infertility"
In your section I would change the sentence to say "Opium smoking with inhalation of lead
particles could cause lead poisoning." The remaining part of that sentence and the use of the
word "abuser" feels loaded. The following sentence is also confusing. Are you saying that opium
use by children caused the increase in lead poisoning in part?
METHODS
Turmeric is spelled incorrectly
Alcohol ethylic should be "ethyl alcohol"
RESULTS
Please standardize spacing between words in your table
MAPS
The red numbers on top of the gray background remain very hard to see
DISCUSSION
You've abbreviated GI here. This should be abbreviated at the first occurrence, which is in your
background, and then the abbreviation should be used thereafter
CDC stands for Centers for Disease Control and Prevention - this is misstated in the discussion.
And here you can just use the abbreviation, because you've abbreviated already
Please review this paper.
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Title: Blood Lead Concentrations Among Pediatric Patients with Abdominal Pain; A
Prospective Cross-sectional Study
Version: 3 Date: 20 Sep 2021
Reviewer's report:
The authors have addressed many of the concerns raised by the reviewers. However, many
grammatical issues remain making the paper distracting and hard to read.
BACKGROUND
Don't need comma between "problem, and" in the first line
In second paragraph, first sentence, should be "lead's". The remainder of this sentence is
confusing. Is it supposed to say "it is used in many products"?
"Reduced fertility" can be "infertility"
In your section I would change the sentence to say "Opium smoking with inhalation of lead
particles could cause lead poisoning." The remaining part of that sentence and the use of the
word "abuser" feels loaded. The following sentence is also confusing. Are you saying that opium
use by children caused the increase in lead poisoning in part?
METHODS
Turmeric is spelled incorrectly
Alcohol ethylic should be "ethyl alcohol"
RESULTS
Please standardize spacing between words in your table
MAPS
The red numbers on top of the gray background remain very hard to see
DISCUSSION
You've abbreviated GI here. This should be abbreviated at the first occurrence, which is in your
background, and then the abbreviation should be used thereafter
CDC stands for Centers for Disease Control and Prevention - this is misstated in the discussion.
And here you can just use the abbreviation, because you've abbreviated already
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